The table below gives information about the underground railway systems in six cities. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below. Make comparisons where relevant.

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The table provides general information and

statistic

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statistics

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about

metro

systems in London, Paris, Tokyo, Washington DC, Kyoto and Los Angeles.

Overall

, it is evident from the data that the most used railway system is located in Tokyo.

Also

, the size of

route

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the route

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have

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a positive correlation with

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age, with a small exception for Kyoto and Los Angeles. It is interesting to note that, the

metro

in Tokyo is the third by size,

however

has the biggest flow of passengers, the number of commuters is bigger than in the London

metro

for

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with

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approximately 1200 million users.

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the

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another

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Japan's

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Japan

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metro

system has

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the

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lowest number of passengers per year,

additionaly

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additionally

, the route is shorter than

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the newer Los Angeles underground by 17

kilometers

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kilometres

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. It is noticeable that

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the railway system in Washington DC has

relatively

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a relatively

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small number of users for

such

distance

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a distance

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. The

nearest by size

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metro

sytem

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system

has a 10 times bigger passenger flow.

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5Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
1Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
17Grammar mistakes
 

4 paragraphs

158 words

6.50

Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

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Topic Vocabulary:

underground railway
kilometers of route
passengers per year
extensive network
age of the system
analyze
correlation
outliers
notable comparisons
trends
commuter volume
inauguration date
modernization
historic
capacity
infrastructure
operate
transportation hub
utilization
frequency of service

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