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The table below gives information about student enrolments at Bristol University in 1928, 1958 and 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below gives information about student enrolments at Bristol University in 1928, 1958 and 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The table illustrates data about student enrollments in
Bristol
 in 3 different
period
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, 1928, 1958, and 2008.
Overall
, it is evident that the number of
students
 enrolled in university and the percentage
for
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 foreign
students
 increased. In 1928, there were only 218
students
 enrolled, most of
which
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 were male with 58%.
The half
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Half
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 of the
students
 came from within 30 miles of
Bristol
 and 5% of them were from foreign 3
countries
. The number of
students
 increased to 1046 in 1958, 5 times as many
students
 as it was in 1928, with 68% male
students
. In comparison with 1928, the figure for
students
 joining from within 30 miles of
Bristol
 decreased and reached 14% in 1958, with 6% of the
students
 from 27
countries
. Turning to 2008, the number of
the
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students
 was at its highest point, at 6377, which was 6 times more than that of 1958.
While
,
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 the male
students
 took the lead in 1928 and 1958, the ratio for female
students
 outnumbered the male ones with 54%.
In addition
, only 1-2% of them came from 30 miles
of
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from
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Bristol
,
on the other
hand
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hand,
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 28% were from overseas
countries
 attending from 98
countries
.
Resul
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Vocabulary: Replace the words bristol, students, countries with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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