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The pie chart represents the source of fish import to Canada and the table shows the total value in Billions of Dollars.

The pie chart represents the source of fish import to Canada and the table shows the total value in Billions of Dollars.
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The pie charts illustrate the proportion of the share of fish
imports
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 by
Canada
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 from
the
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different parts of the world over numerous years.
Moreover
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, the table depicts the total
value
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 of
imports
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 in billions of
dollars
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.
Overall
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, it is evident from the
overall
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 analysis that
Canada
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 was importing its most fish from other countries in 2010 but the percentage from
China
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 increased significantly in 2015 and 2020.
Also
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, the table depicts the total
value
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 of
import
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imports
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 which was rising with time. In 2010,
Canada
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 imported 24% of its total fish demand from
China
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, 17% from Norway, and 59% from other nations. In 2015,
China
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's share increased substantially and climbed to 49%.
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, the percentage of Norway soared to 24%
whereas
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imports
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 from other areas
fel
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fell
 to 27%.
Share
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The share
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 of
China
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 and 'others' in 2020 declined marginally to 44% and 26%, respectively.
However
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, the figures for Norway increased to 30% in
overall
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imports
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 by
Canada
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. The total
value
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 of
imports
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 from
Canada
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 has been increasing over time. The volume in 2010 was 8.66 billion
dollars
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. The figures for 2015 increased drastically and touched 12.94 billion
dollars
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. In 2020, the total
value
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 of
imports
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 soared to 16.52 billion
dollars
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.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "overall".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words imports, canada, value, dollars, china with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "depicts" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "soared" was used 2 times.
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