In the past lectures were the traditional method of teaching large numbers of students. Nowadays new technology is increasingly being used to teach students. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this new approach in teaching?
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What works well
3The essay covers both the advantages and disadvantages of traditional and modern teaching methods, addressing the task appropriately.
You have provided relevant examples, such as the use of traditional methods in India and the benefits of technology for remote learning, which help to illustrate your points effectively.
The overall structure of the essay is logical, with separate paragraphs discussing different aspects of the topic.
Improvement Suggestions
4Your essay would benefit from a clearer and more concise introduction. While you have introduced the topic, the intro feels a bit lengthy and slightly repetitive. Try to make the introduction more direct and to the point.
Make sure each paragraph focuses on a single main idea. Some of your paragraphs attempt to cover multiple points, which can lead to confusion. For example, in the second paragraph, the discussion about concentration and group discussions would be clearer if split into distinct points.
Ensure your conclusion summarizes the key points without introducing new information. Your conclusion does a good job of summarizing, but the prediction could be stated more clearly.
Increase the use of linking phrases (e.g., furthermore, however, on the other hand) to improve the flow of your essay. This will help to connect your ideas more smoothly and create a more cohesive argument.
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