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The chart shows requests for information at a tourist office in the United Kingdom from January to June.

The chart shows requests for information at a tourist office in the United Kingdom from January to June.
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The line graph illustrates
amount
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the amount
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 of data inquired
by
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in
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3 ways ,
that is
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 persons ,
letter
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letters
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 and telephone at a tourism office in the UK for 6 months from January to
June
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.
Overall
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 , when information asked
thru
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through
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 individual and telephone
have
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apply
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experienced an incredible increase , there was
considerable
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a considerable
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 decrease in letters As the graph shows amount of emails started just under 800 hundred in January and it kept
this
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 shown until March.There was a considerable crash at 400 in May .
Then
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 the figure remained steady at 400 until
June
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.Regarding
to
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apply
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the
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apply
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technical communication , in January it started at 900 , followed by a minor drop at 800 in February .There was an insignificant increase to 1000 remained steady until April.It
has
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apply
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experienced
dramatic
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a dramatic
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 rise at 1600 in
June
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.
By
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In
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the
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apply
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contrast, People’s requests started at 400.By the months the figure has grown dramatically until 1900 in
June
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.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words june with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "dramatic" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "considerable" was used 2 times.
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