Scientists predict in the near future cars will be driven by computers, not people. Do you think it is a positive or negative development?

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modern life, technology
developts
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scientists believe that in the near future
cars
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because of
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of computers.
Although
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situation has some positives, in my opinion, the
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are greater. On the one hand, there are significant
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benefits or positives of
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cars
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driven by computers. The first one is that, when
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computers replace to drivers, families having a travel,
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can not need a member to drive
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, in
this
time, everybody in
family
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has time together without to control
vehicle
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.
Futhermore
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Furthermore
, the salary to pay for
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driver
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by the month can
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down
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this
becames
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because
a reason that made
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are more expensive than
driverless
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car
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cars
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.
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,
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cars
, which
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directed by
computer
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computers
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bring two main risks.
Firstly
, the
car
depends on
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navigation
systems in order to drive in places that clients require, when electric maps in
computer
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the computer
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is
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wrong, the
car
can not attain customer's request.
Secondly
,
computer
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computers
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do not have flexible
ability
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abilities
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and
emotion
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emotions
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since in some urgent instances
it
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can not deal with as appropriate
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results
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as
human
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.
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, when
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occur
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, if clients
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injured or
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unconscious,
instead
of looking for
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assistance
from the same
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human
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, machines and systems just
slience
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silence
science
or break. In conclusion, in spite of some positives
such
as spending time
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neccessary
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necessary
working
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and reducing
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, I think
cars
without people
direct
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has
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more negative of losing one's way and unexpected incidents.
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Use more specific examples to support your arguments. Providing detailed instances where automated cars could fail or succeed will make your points more convincing and engaging for the reader.
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You've provided a balanced view by discussing both the positives and negatives of computer-driven cars.
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Your essay structure is sound with clear sections for introduction, positives, negatives, and conclusion.

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  • Artificial intelligence
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  • Environmental impact
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  • Freedom of choice
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