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research shows that bussiness meetings discussions and training are happening online nowadays . do the advantages outweighs the disadvantages

#research #bussiness #meetings #discussions
in current days , the organisation
meetings
 and teachings are now done
virtual
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 and there are merits and demerits of using online
platform
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platforms
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such
 as it is easy and quick to conduct a meeting ,
it
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but it
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 hinders some of the ideas and practical skills if needed irrespectively. By doing virtual
meetings
, it is fast and quick to hold a meeting and
it
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they
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gives
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a
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room for a quite number of people to join
hence
it
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gives
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 every member an opportunity to participate unlike physical
meetings
 they are limited
due to
 various reasons
such
 as venue , some individuals they might be out of the city .
Therefore
 it is remarkable to use
electronics
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 gadgets
on
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meetings
. Decisions are made quickly since
every one
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 is required to give their own opinions instantly .
Hence
 it is not
time consuming
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comparing
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 to physical
meetings
 it requires a lot of hierarchy for
decisions
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 making.
However
, virtual
meetings
has
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some
its
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apply
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drawbacks
such
 as , training usually requires physical practice
therefore
, it is difficult for one to put
in
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into
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 practice.
Moreso
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Moreover
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, sometimes the call
maybe
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may be
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 distracted by
network
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the network
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 . In my own opinion , the advantages of holding
bussiness
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business
meetings
 and training online
outweighs
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outweigh
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 the disadvantages of doing it
physical
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physically
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 to a greater extent
such
 that online
meetings
 are quick and easy to conduct rather than
face to face
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face-to-face
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.
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General
Keep improving your writing by practicing the use of complex sentence structures and a wider range of vocabulary to make your essay even more compelling.
Content
The essay presents a well-balanced view, highlighting both advantages and disadvantages before stating a clear opinion.
Structure
The logical flow of ideas from paragraph to paragraph enhances the coherence and cohesion of the essay.
Support
You effectively used examples to support your main points, making your arguments more persuasive.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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