The bar chart shows the results of a survey, in which people in Europe and the USA were asked what they consider to be the most important factor in the success of a business. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart shows the results of a survey, in which people in Europe and the USA were asked what they consider to be the most important factor in the success of a business.

 

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar graph compares the
factors
regarded as the most significant for a
business
to succeed by surveyees in Europe and the USA.
Overall
,
character
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of the director and
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the styles
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styles
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to manage
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the
business
were the most important and
political
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the political
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situation was the least for Americans. Europeans
also
considered the management of the
business
to be the major factor
whereas
external
factors
to be the minor by Europeans. Starting with the results of the survey given by Americans,
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peronality
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personality
of the director and the style of
business
had the largest proportions with 40%.
Lower
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percentage of people answered national
securtiy
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security
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just below 20% and only less than 10% of people believed external
factors
were essential.
Furthermore
,
political
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situation had the lowest rate with approximately 5%.
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to the response of Europeans,
the
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business
management was
also
believed to be the most crucial element with nearly 40%, which was a little higher than that of Americans. Regarding the political situation, the personality of the manager and the national economy, they ranged from under 20% to
slighly
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slightly
above 20%.
Lastly
, the external
factors
were the least selected with below 10%.
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