Countries are becoming more and more similar because people are able to buy the same products anywhere in the world. Do you think this is a positive or negative development?
It is inevitable that the implication of sophisticated technologies
make
humans successfully purchase freights from another Change the verb form
makes
country
, which also
makes country
alike to one another. Regarding that Fix the agreement mistake
countries
phenomena
, I see Fix the agreement mistake
phenomenon
this
situation can bring negative developments because of following
reasons.
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the following
Firstly
, it can make country
lose their authenticity. Imagine if the authentic red ginseng Correct article usage
a country
that is
only culminated in South Korea or the dark brown chocolate that is
yielded specifically from organic farmland Switzerland
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in Switzerland
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could
purcashed
by Correct your spelling
purchased
people
in other nations through e commerce
platforms without Add a hyphen
e-commerce
have
to go there. Change the verb form
having
As a result
, the value of those products can potentially reduce
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be reduced
people
begin to think that they can possess those freights easily. Furthermore
, it can make people
to
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under appreciate
the effort of some parties that are involved in the product making.
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underappreciate
Secondly
, the easy accessiblity
to certain import products can demotivate Correct your spelling
accessibility
people
's ambitions. One clear illustration of this
case can be seen among several Indonesian youths who eager
to work hard for a high payment; Add a missing verb
are eager
therefore
, they can save the money to purchase authentic red ginseng products directly in South Korea. Nevertheless
, if that product can be bought from e-commerce platforms like Amazon or Shopee, it can diminish their motivation to travel to another country
, emerging
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creating
less-motivated
feelings and resulting in Correct your spelling
less motivated
the
reduction Correct article usage
a
of
their work performance.
In conclusion, notwithstanding Change preposition
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with
the fact of the easiness to possess things from other regions in the present times, I see that Change preposition
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condition
can Correct article usage
the condition
led
to some detrimental impacts, particularly because specific Change the verb form
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