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Your English-speaking friend has asked for your help with a college project helshe is doing about celebrating New Year in different countries. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter say how important New Year is to people in your country describe how New Year is celebrated in your country explain what you like about New Year celebrations in your country

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Dear Amir Temur, I heard from my boss that you are planning to spend New
Year
 in different countries. Why do you want to celebrate the New
Year
 without me? Well, the New
Year
 is very important in our
country
.
Everyone
 in our
country
 waits for New
Year
, they prepare their homes, streets, and other decorations. I think
everyone
 likes New
Year
 because of the snow, and
everyone
 will be in a good mood. In our
country
, we
havea
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have a
 lot of ways ways of waiting for the New
Year
. We decorate our houses trees, and shops in unusual ways.
Everyone
 shares their emotions. We decorate our
country
's New
Year
 tree very beautifully. In fact, during
New
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Year
, we spend a lot of money on decorating our New
Year
 tree. I really enjoy the New
Year
 celebrations in our
country
.
Firstly
,
everyone
 helps each other,
for example
, in decorating the New
Year
 tree or preparing food.
Secondly
, we show respect to people from other countries. You can celebrate the New
Year
 in our
country
this
year
. We will have great parties and concerts Join us, my dear colleague I hope
i
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 will hear soon Yours sincerely, Saidakbar
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Accuracy
While your letter is warm-hearted and depicts the essence of New Year celebrations vividly, be mindful of minor typographical errors like 'havea' which should be 'have a'. Such small corrections can enhance the clarity of your message.
Detailing
Consider providing a slightly more detailed personal anecdote or specific tradition to enrich your explanation of why you like New Year celebrations in your country. This would offer a deeper insight into the cultural significance of the holiday.
Structure
Your letter successfully conveys the importance of New Year in your country with a clear and engaging structure, making it easy to follow your explanations and sentiments.
Tone
You've adeptly managed to maintain a friendly and appropriate tone throughout the letter, making it feel personal and sincere.
Invitation
Great job in creating a welcoming atmosphere by inviting your friend to join the celebrations, showcasing the hospitable spirit of your country's New Year celebrations.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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