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Band 6.5

The best way to solve the world's environmental problem is to increase the price of fuels. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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It is often argued that making gasoline expensive is the most convenient solution to resolve environmental
catastrophe
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. I completely agree with the statement and think that adding more cost over
fuel
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 is
the
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a
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 viable option to reduce environmental pollution.
Firstly
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,
carbon-dioxide
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carbon dioxide
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 emission by automobiles contributes mostly to
pollute
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polluting
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 the enskinment. Increasing the price of fossil
fuel
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, which is the driving force of
vehicles
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 results in reducing the number of private cars. If
people
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 need to spend more money to purchase
fuel
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 to run their
vehicles
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,
then
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 either they will drive less, or others will not show interest in buying a new car, which is
run
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by
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on
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 fossil
fuel
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.
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, European countries add more taxes on fossil
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fuel driven
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fuel-driven
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 cars,
whereas
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 assign duty
benefit
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benefits
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 for electric
vehicles
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. Because of
this
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, electric car manufacturing companies like Tesla boomed in the European market.
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, higher rates of
fuel
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 encourage
people
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 to find out other cheaper solutions, which is not related to
fuel
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.
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,
people
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 will motivate the transportation system which is green for
environment
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the environment
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.
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,
people
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 will not use
car
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the car
a car
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 for short
distance
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distances
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 travelling
Such
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 as shopping
,
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 if they need to spend
extra
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an extra
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 amount
for
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on
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fuel
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,
rather
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rather a
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cycle
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cycling
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 and walking will be preferred in
this
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 case.
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, to ensure
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a pollution
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pollution free
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pollution-free
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 atmosphere some countries provide
by-cycle
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a by-cycle
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 free of cost.
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, the influence of price
hike
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hikes
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of
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on
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fuel
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 is huge for a clean atmosphere.
To conclude
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, I strongly believe that rising
up
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apply
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fossil
fuel
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price
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prices
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 mitigate
environment
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environmental
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 pollution because it demotivates to buy and drive
less
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fewer
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vehicles
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.
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example usage
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engagement strategy
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introduction
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specific examples
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