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The diagram below shows the plan of a medical centre in 2008 and 2010. Summerize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant

The diagram below shows the plan of a medical centre in 2008 and 2010. Summerize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant
#plan #centre #summerize #information #features #comparisons
The diagram shows
plan
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the plan
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 structure of
new
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the new
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 medical
center
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centre
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 for two years 2008 and 2010 .
These both
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Both
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 plans were given to provide information about
hospital
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hospitals
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 for those who need to get treatment. The hospital in 2008 was
planning
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planned
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 with 6 categories each of them providing services for patients. Once the patient entered the medical center on the left side laboratory
room
then
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and then
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 moved to
northeast
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the northeast
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 toward
waiting
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the waiting
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room
 would be in
middle
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the middle
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 after crossing that area the main door was open
in
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on
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north
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the north
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 side
three
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of three
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doctors
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doctors'
doctor's
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 rooms
then
 going to
east
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the east
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 treatment
room
 would be in
last
 place in building. The development and modifications were done to
same
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the same
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 building in 2010 the main entrance was
same
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the same
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in
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on
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 both
map
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maps
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, the number of rooms was increased and there were more rooms constructed to accommodate more people .The directions were similar to
those
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that treatment room
those treatment rooms
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treatment
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of treatment
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room
 ,
laboratory
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laboratories
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 and
doctor
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doctor's
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 offices but , a pharmacy
need
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needed
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 to take west
then
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and then
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 turn right after
few
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a few
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 steps
the
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to the
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 place where need to go.
Finally
 ,
updated
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the updated
an updated
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 plan was given more information about how many patients or places were being given in that medical
center
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centre
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