The modern life is harmful for people asit bring a lot of preasure and reduce the quality of relationships. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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In's today modern
life
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, some
people
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believe that modern
life
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decline
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declines

The plural verb decline does not appear to agree with the singular subject modern life. Consider changing the verb form for subject-verb agreement.

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the connection of
relationship
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relationships

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between
people
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along with
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soar
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soaring

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more
stress
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detrimental
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and detrimental

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effect
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effects

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for
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on

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human
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humans

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. I agree with
this
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opinion and
this
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essay
to day
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today

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will discuss some reasons to support the statement. On the one hand, there are two major
caution
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cautions

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that
people
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think modern
life
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can be handy for
relationship
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relationships

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and reduce
preasure
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pressure

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.
Firstly
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, more and more vehicles, systems and
entertainments
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entertainment

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are provided to
human
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humans

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in order to relax and connect. After
a
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apply

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hard
working
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work

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or school,
the
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apply

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boys or males can play
game
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games

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to decrease
stress
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,
while
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the
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apply

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girls or females can watch
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the video
a video

The noun phrase video seems to be missing a determiner before it. Consider adding an article.

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video
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videos

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in
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on

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Tik
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TikTok

The word Tik doesn’t seem to fit this context. Consider replacing it with a different one.

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tok and
Youtube
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YouTube

The word Youtube doesn’t seem to fit this context. Consider replacing it with a different one.

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.
Secondly
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the network of modern
life
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,
speciallyy
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especially
specially

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the Internet
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Internet
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the Internet

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and social media can link
long distance
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long-distance

It appears that long distance is missing a hyphen. Consider adding the hyphen(s).

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relationships.
For example
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, if you live in Vietnam, you can call
with
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apply

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your mom who lives in Japan by video call in
everyday
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every day

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.
On the other hand
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,
the
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modern
life
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which
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brings greater separation in a relationship and financial or job borden. The first one is that when
people
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too
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to

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immerse
yourself
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themselves

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in virtual relationships on social networks, they can
forgest
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forget

The word forgest doesn’t seem to fit this context. Consider replacing it with a different one.

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their families,
they
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their

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offsprings
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offspring

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and their parents which
were
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are

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great important
people
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never lack in their
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Use synonyms

It is important to use synonyms in your writing, as you will lose marks if you repeat words from the question and use the same words in your essay over and over. If you do that, it will show the examiner that you have a limited vocabulary and you want to do the opposite for a high band score.

life
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lives

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. In some situations,
people
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do not choose to take care of old parents,
instead
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of
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apply

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apply

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this
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, they decide to chat with a new friend
in
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on

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Internet
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the Internet

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.
Furthermore
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, the
mofern
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modern

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life
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creats
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creates

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many new jobs in
vary
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various

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fields which
request
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require

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high
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a high

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intennsity
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intensity

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of work. If
people
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want
enomous
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enormous

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income, they have to accept
a
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apply

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work that
have
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has

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presure
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pressure

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and rejection. In conclusion,
although
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the
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modern
life
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have
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has

The plural verb have does not appear to agree with the singular subject the modern life. Consider changing the verb form for subject-verb agreement.

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some advantages to
asisst
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assist

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humanin
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human

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relationships and fall
stress
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, I agree that
this
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problem of breaking or more
stress
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are
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is

The verb are does not seem to agree with the subject. Consider changing the verb form.

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greater.

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Introduction clarity
Consider improving your introduction by clearly stating your opinion on the subject, which would give the reader a clear understanding of your stance from the beginning.
Sentence Structure
Work on varying your sentence structures to enhance readability. Incorporating a mix of complex and compound sentences can make your writing more engaging.
Spelling and Grammar
Pay attention to spelling and grammatical errors, as they can distract from your message. Words like 'preasure' should be corrected to 'pressure', and 'asoar' should be 'soar'.
Precision and Typo
Use more precise language and check for typo errors such as 'In's' (should be 'In'), 'speciallyy' (should be 'specially'), and 'mofern' (should be 'modern').
Argument Reinforcement
While discussing both sides of the argument, ensure that your conclusion clearly restates your own viewpoint. This helps to reinforce your position and provides a strong ending to your essay.
Use of Examples
You effectively used examples to support your points, particularly with the mention of how modern life affects relationships and job pressures.
Structure
Your essay structure includes an introduction, body paragraphs discussing both views, and a conclusion, which is good for coherence and cohesion.

Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

Examples make your writing easier to understand by illustrating points more effectively.

Examples, if used properly, not only help you get higher marks for ‘Task Response’ but also for ‘Coherence’.

When giving examples it is best to put them after your main idea or topic sentence. They can be used in the middle of supporting sentences or they can be used to start a new sentence. There is no rule for where exactly to give examples in essays, logically they would come after your main idea/topic sentence or just after a supporting sentence.

Linking words for giving examples:

  • for example
  • for instance
  • to illustrate this
  • to give a clear example
  • such as
  • namely
  • to illustrate
  • take, for example

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