The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbear island between 2010 and 2017.
The figure displays how many
people
visited Carribean Island
from the period
2010 to 2017. The line graph divided
into three Add a missing verb
is divided
part
which are the number of Fix the agreement mistake
parts
people
stayed
Wrong verb form
staying
in
land, Change preposition
on
in
cruise ships and Change preposition
on
its
total. Generally, there was an Change the word
the
overall
upward trend going on over the whole reported period
which went 350% from originally 1 million
to 3,5 million
at the end
of period
Add an article
the period
a period
To begin
, for the
Correct determiner usage
those
one
stayed at the Correct pronoun usage
who
cruishing
ships, there was an Correct your spelling
crushing
cruising
overall
inclination from approximately a quarter million
in 2010 rose four fold
Correct your spelling
fourfold
at the end
of period
with 2 Add an article
the period
million
people
in 2017. Initially
, the number was lower than that of on island
, however
it was turned in the Add a comma
however,
period
2015 to 2016.
As for the tourists Correct pronoun usage
who resided
resided
on the Wrong verb form
residing
island
, the amount
of Change the quantifier
number
people
was in
Verb problem
apply
overall
increased 2 times from around three
quarter of Correct determiner usage
a
million
Correct article usage
a million
in
the beginning of the Change the preposition
at
period
. However
, there was a fluctuation since it plateaued in 2013 to 2015 at one and half
Change the article
a half
million
and then
slighlty
Correct your spelling
slightly
decline
in 2016 before went back Wrong verb form
declined
at
the same level in 2017.
All in all, the number of visitors had risen for both two groups with slight fluctuation along the way. The visitors who stayed on the Change preposition
to
island
was
superior Correct subject-verb agreement
were
than
that of on the ships, Change the preposition
to
however
it Add a comma
however,
was
overlapped in 1 and half years before the end of the Unnecessary verb
apply
period
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "at the end, however, overall".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words people, island, period, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stayed" was used 3 times.
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