The chart below shows the numbers of three types of visitors to a museum between 1997 and 2012. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the numbers of three types of visitors to a museum between 1997 and 2012. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The given bar graph illustrates the information about the numbers of three types of
visitors
to a museum in the period of 15 years from 1997 to 2012.
Overall
, It could be seen the total of
visitors
was
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increased.
While
the figures for adult
visitors
were higher than the others. On the one hand, the number of adult
visitors
has risen steadily from 1997 to 2022, around 300.000 and 302.200 respectively,
then
that had dramatic a go up and reached the top in 2007 with about 400.500 people .
Besides
, the proportions of adult
visitors
were more than
visitors
aged under 15 and younger
visitors
saw a downward trend
through
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the whole years surveyed.
On the other hand
, the percentage of special Exhibition
Visitors
was the lowest but that saw an upward trend. In 1997 it had increased slightly from 28.000 to 29.200 in 2002,
then
continued to rise to 2012 about 42.000.
In contrast
, the number of
visitors
under 15 had declined
and
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hitting
the
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lowest point in 2012
about
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82.300.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words visitors with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "numbers of" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 4 times.
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