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You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The charts below show the changes in ownership ofelectrical appliances andamount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between1920 and 2019. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, andmake comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The charts below show the changes in ownership ofelectrical appliances andamount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between1920 and 2019. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, andmake comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
#minutes #show #changes #ownership #appliances #andamount #time #housework #households #country #between1920 #summarise #information #features #andmake #comparisons
The line charts represent the difference in the
amount
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number
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 of household appliances, including washing
machine
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machines
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,
refrigerator
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refrigerators
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, and
vacuum
cleaner
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cleaners
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, that were owned and the number of
hours
 spent doing house
chore
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chores
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 per week in a country
during
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from
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 1920 to 2019.
Overall
, the amount of
the
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apply
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appliances apparently
increase
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increased
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 during the span of a century, with the washing
machine
 slowly
incline
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inclining
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,
while
 the fridge and the
vacuum
has
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have
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a
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an
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 enormous jump in
the
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apply
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popularity.
However
, the housework
require
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requires
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less
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fewer
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hours
 over time.
According to
 the graph, the washing
machine
 used to be the most popular in 1920, with 40% of
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the household
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household
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households
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had
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having
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the
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a
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machine
, followed by the
vacuum
 with 30%.
Then
, the fridge and
vacuum
 started to surge hugely to 100% in the
year
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years
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 1980 and 2000 respectively. Meanwhile, the washing
machine
On the other hand
, the amount of time for doing chores was fifty
hours
 per week in 1920 and it steadily
decline
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declined
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 until 1960 to twenty
hours
 per week. The number
continue
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continued
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 to decrease with only approximately ten
hours
 in 2019.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words machine, vacuum, hours with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 3 times.
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