the chart shows that male and female teacheres in six different types of educational setting in the UK in 2010
The given chart depicts the percentage of male and female
teachers
in six distinguished types of educational settings in the UK in 2010.
Overall
, it can be seen from the chart that women hold the lion's share of nursery/Pre-school
and primary school Correct your spelling
preschool
while
men are responsible for private training institutes and university
far more than women.
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universities
To begin
with, women occupy the vast majority of pre-school teachers
and primary teachers
with a massive around 95% for both. On the contrary
, men make up a tiny majority of those figures below 10%. Next,
the proportion of female teachers
in secondary school is more than 10% than that of male teachers
around 55%.
Moving on to the other categories, the number of female teachers
in college is as same as male teachers
about 50%. Around 60% of male teachers
in private training institutes which is more than 15% of female teachers
. Lastly
, most university teachers
are male with 70% while
female teachers
account for less than twice that.Submitted by lethithut123 on
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