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The table describes the changes of people who went for international travel in 1990, 1995, 2000 and 2005. (million).

The table describes the changes of people who went for international travel in 1990, 1995, 2000 and 2005. (million).
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The table illustrates the changes in the
number
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 of
people
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 who
traveled
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travelled
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 internationally in 1990, 1995, 2000, and 2005, respectively.
Overall
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,
people
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 in Europe travelled the most, and the least travelled
people
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 were from the Middle East. The average
number
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 of
people
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 who travelled in 1990 increased significantly from 448.9
million
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 to 693.7
million
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 in 2005. Europe had the highest
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 of visitors in all four years, with an average of 280.2
million
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 in 1990, 390.3
million
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 in 1995, 393.2
million
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 in 2000 and 400.2
million
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 in 2005, respectively. The
number
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 of visitors skyrocketed to 135.8
million
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 in Asia and the Pacific, which was the highest figure compared to all the previous years. International wanderers from 1990 to 2005 in countries like Africa and the Middle East ranged from 9.8
million
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 to 28.7
million
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.
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, there was a modest decline in the
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 of pilgrims in America, with an average of only 113.2
million
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 in 2005 , compared to 80.5
million
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 in 1990.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, people, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "changes" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • significant increase
  • international travel
  • popular destinations
  • economic growth
  • technological advancements
  • ease of travel
  • cultural exchange
  • globalization
  • fluctuations
  • trend
  • millions of travelers
  • annual growth rate
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