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In some countries , more and more people are becoming interested in finding out about the History of the house or building they live in. What are the reasons for this ? How can people research this ?

#countries #people #history #house #research
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 world has
a
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several
countries
 and prominent historical places. Currently, in some
countries
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a lot of
people
 becoming more curious
in
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 finding out about the history of the house and exchanging their houses
to
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historical types of atmosphere, especially inside part of the building. In
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 will discuss major reasons
increasing
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interested
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humans
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 and how can
people
 research
this
. On the one hand, there are
variety
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 reasons of
searching
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 and
making
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taking
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 a tour
to
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 foreign historical places.
Firstly
, some ages before that kind of
building's
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building
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 had
an
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own master of drawing patterns
to
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 the walls and
this
 is a reason
of
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 coming and surpassing interest
into
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people
's souls.
For instance
, in Uzbekistan the Samarkand region has " Registon
square
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" and
this
 place attracts other
countries
people
 with the three big building's patterns and the interior design which is related to historical style.
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, there is
also
have
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an impact
of
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 architectural style. From my perspective, a lot of
people
 have
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 intention to exchange interior design and architectural
part
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 in order to connect to the long past centuries vibe
to
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 their home.
On the other hand
, certainly many human
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a
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struggle to
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 for their own design,
that is
 why, everyone arranges their voyage plans to the various
countries
 where
located
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the most beautiful historical places.
To conclude
, a number of
people
 have an interest
seeking
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in seeking
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 out
history
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 of the house and transforming
this
types
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 of home atmosphere
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Historical research
  • Genealogy
  • Architectural styles
  • Heritage
  • Relics
  • Oral history
  • Archival records
  • Museum exhibits
  • Historical societies
  • House tours
  • Renovation projects
  • Original blueprints
  • Careful documentation
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