The graph below shows the contribution of three sectors-agriculture, manufacturing and businessand financial service-to the uk economy in the twentieth century

The graph illustrates the amount of impacts of various parts ranging from farming to manufacturing in monetary matters of
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the UK
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in the
last
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Overall
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show
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agriculture
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the agriculture
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portion had reduced
while
business
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the business
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and services sector effect increased. In1900, agriculture had the most effect with 49
percent
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per cent
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per area among other competitors and in
second
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the second
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stage was manufacturing by 43
percent
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per cent
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and in the
last
part followed by business and financial service which affected about 5
percent
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per cent
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. After five decades, farming reached
peak
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the peak
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of 50
percent
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,
whereas
it had a remarkable dropped to 15
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per cent
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in 1975 and
this
downward trend
followed
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was followed
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by under 5
percent
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in 2000.
However
,
business
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the business
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experienced
and
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an
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increasing
tend
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trend
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with a double
percent
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in 1950 and a noticeable rose to 25
percent
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in 1975.
finally
, in 2000 finance services
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to 35
percent
. Manufacturing saw a reduction trend
during
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over
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100 years and in 1950, it had a slight decrease to 38
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per cent
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and it continued in 1975 when production had 30
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per cent
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and in 2000 it showed
significant
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a significant
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decline to 18
percent
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per cent
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of influence on
economy
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the economy
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.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "last".
Vocabulary: Replace the words percent with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "show" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Economic diversification
  • Sector contribution
  • Industrialization
  • Modernization
  • Fluctuation
  • Peak periods
  • Dominant force
  • Economic landscape
  • Production-based economy
  • Service-oriented economy
  • World wars
  • Industrial revolutions
  • Information age
  • Speculation
  • Future trends
  • Government policies
  • Global trade
  • Technological advancements
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