The table below shows local catches and imports of fresh fish into Perth, Australia for the years 2004 - 2014.

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The given table indicates regional
imports
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and catches of fresh fish in
Australian
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the Australian
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city
Perth
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of Perth
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during the 10-year time period from 2004 to 2014. When looking at the chart at first glance it is obvious that during the decade figures experienced fluctuations. It is salient to note that the highest total was in 2009 with 8949 metric
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while
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in 2004 Perth experienced the lowest total of 3142.2 metric
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. Over the period, from 2004 to 2008 the figure for local catches experienced an upward trend, having its peak in 2008 and
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the figure gradually decreased. In the meantime, the figure for
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was disproportionately low compared to locals.
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metric
tons
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for
imports
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had more
dramatical
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fluctuations over the years
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peaking in the year
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2012 with 1227.3 metric
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.
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, we can see that the figures for local,
imports
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and total
differs
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significantly.
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local
cathces
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catches
surprasses
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surpasses
imports
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substantially every year.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words imports, tons with synonyms.
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