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the chart below gives information about how gamilies in once country spen their weekly income in 1968 and in 2018

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The bar chart illustrates
average
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the average
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 spending per week by families in 1968 and 2018.
Overall
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, it is seen that the highest average
consumption
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 in 1968 and 2018 was food and leisure, respectively. In 1968, the food average
consumption
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 reached 35%
while
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 the amount of
consumption
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 for housing clothing and footwear was the same.
Then
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, the rest of the expenditures (Fuel and power, Household
goods
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, Personal
goods
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, Transport and Leisure) recorded less than 10%. In 50 years, the figure
of
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for
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 Fuel and power and personal
goods
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were
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was
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 the
least
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lowest
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 proportion, recording less than 5%. The
consumption
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 of food decreased two times.
However
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, in the part of leisure, transportation, and housing increased than before. With regards to household
goods
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, there was no change. Fuel and power and personal
goods
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 dropped to less than 5%.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words consumption, goods with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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