The graph and table below show the average monthly temperatures and the average number of hours of sunshine per year in three major cities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The line chart illustrates the average climate and how many
hours
the sun shines
in
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monthly
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a monthly
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basis every
year
in London, New
York
, and
Sydney
.
Overall
, the hottest city
in
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the end of the
year
is
Sydney
, and the coldest
one
is New
York
.
Sydney
is the coldest city in mid-
year
,
while
New
York
is the hottest
one
at the same time. New
York
has the highest amount of sunshine a
year
among
three
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the three
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cities
. Based on the information, the hottest time in New
York
is July,
while
the coldest
one
is January.
Although
lied
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it is
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on
separate
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a separate
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continent from New
York
, the weather in London is not quite different, where its hottest period is July and August, and its coldest
one
is January.
On the other hand
,
due to
the position of those three
cities
against the equator,
Sydney
has different
condition
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conditions
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from the rest of the
cities
. The temperature in
Sydney
reaches its peak in January, and it gradually declines until mid-
year
. After that, it slightly inclines from month to month
,
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and gains its peak again
at the end
of
year
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the year
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.
Furthermore
, there are
differences
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amount
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amounts
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of
sunlights
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sunlight
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in those
cities
. New
York
has sunlights more than the other
cities
, with 2,535
hours
a
year
, followed by
Sydney
with 2,473
hours
. London has the fewest sunshine throughout the
year
, only 1,180
hours
.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words hours, year, york, sydney, one, cities with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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