The table below shows local catches and imports of fresh fish into Perth, Australia for the years 2004 - 2014. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The table illustrates information about how many internal captures and external goods of fresh fish were addressed in Perth, Australia, over the 11-year period.
Overall
, total
number of Change the article
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the total
fishes
in Perth had an upward trend between the start of the period and 2009, Fix the agreement mistake
fish
then
the number fluctuated until 2014.
Firstly
, in 2004, the local catch was 2677.7 metric tons
. The quantity rose dramatically until 2008, which was the peak level of native catches weighing at 8136.2 metric tons
. Following that, it is obvious that there has been downward
trend in the captures of locals for the next 5 years, reaching 4271.3 metric Add an article
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tons
in 2012.
However
, substantial growth can be seen in last
2 years, at 4739.9 and 5031.9 metric Correct article usage
the last
tons
respectively.
In terms of imports, the numbers fluctuated at
the first 5 years, averaging about 450 metric Change preposition
in
tons
. Subsequently
, levelled off between 2009 and 2013, at around 1100 metric tons
. Finally
, finished the given period with 782.7 metric tons
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