The table below shows local catches and imports of fresh fish into Perth, Australia for the years 2004 - 2014. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The table illustrates information about how many internal captures and external goods of fresh fish were addressed in Perth, Australia, over the 11-year period.
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number of
fishes
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in Perth had an upward trend between the start of the period and 2009,
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the number fluctuated until 2014.
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, in 2004, the local catch was 2677.7 metric
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. The quantity rose dramatically until 2008, which was the peak level of native catches weighing at 8136.2 metric
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. Following that, it is obvious that there has been
downward
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trend in the captures of locals for the next 5 years, reaching 4271.3 metric
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in 2012.
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, substantial growth can be seen in
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2 years, at 4739.9 and 5031.9 metric
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respectively. In terms of imports, the numbers fluctuated
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the first 5 years, averaging about 450 metric
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, levelled off between 2009 and 2013, at around 1100 metric
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, finished the given period with 782.7 metric
tons
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words tons with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "fluctuated" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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