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The bar chart shows the number of visitors to three London Museums between 2007 and 2012. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The multiple bar chart compares the traffic among three museums in London from 2007 to 2012. The museums are the National Gallery, the
Victoria
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 and
Albert
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Museum
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, and the
British
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Museum
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.
Overall
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, the popularity of the National Gallery rocketed up through the years, from being the lowest to the highest
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 of visitors
at the end
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 of the period.
However
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, the
Victoria
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 and
Albert
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Museum
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 and the
British
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Museum
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 faced a fluctuating trend, the
number
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 of visits went down
then
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 bounced back in the middle of the period.
To begin
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 with, the National Gallery was the lowest with just over 5
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 people visited in 2007.
Besides
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, the
number
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 was growing and reaching more than 15
million
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 in 2012. The traffic was approximately three times higher in the
last
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 year.
On the other hand
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, the
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 and
Albert
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Museum
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 and the
British
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Museum
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 experienced a fall down through the first four and three years, respectively. The
Victoria
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 and
Albert
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Museum
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 was placed in the first rank in terms of
number
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 of visitors in 2007, with around 14
million
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. Unfortunately, it decreased significantly to about 6
million
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 in 2010, but it managed to rise until hit 10
million
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 people in 2012.
Similarly
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, the
British
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Museum
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 started with approximately 11
million
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 visitors to only around 7
million
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 in 2009 and went up to nearly 15
million
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 in the
last
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 period.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "last".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words victoria, albert, museum, british, number, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "went down" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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