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the chart below shows the number of houesholds in the us by thier annual income in 2007 , 2011 and 2015

the chart below shows the number of houesholds in the us by thier annual income in 2007 , 2011 and 2015
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The given bar chart compares the proportion of
households
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 in the US by their annual salary in 2007, 2011 and 2015.
Overall
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, the number of
households
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 who earned more than $100,000 increased in these 3
years
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.
On the other hand
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, the population of people who had an
income
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 less than $25,000 fluctuated in these 3
years
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. It is obvious,
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that Us
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Us
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US
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households
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 who had an
income
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 between $25,000 and $50,000 did not change dramatically.
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, we can see less than 15 million
of
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households
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 in these three
years
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 had an
income
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 between $75,000 and $100,000. It can
also
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 be obtained from the chart that the number of
households
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 who earned money between $50,000 and $75,000 in these 3
years
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 stayed
steedy
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steady
 around 20 million individuals.
Finally
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,
while
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 the number of richest
households
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 in
US
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the US
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 increased significantly, the proportion of
households
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 with lower annual
income
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 stayed stable in all three
years
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.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words households, years, income with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stayed" was used 2 times.
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