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The issue of gay marriage remains controversial. Some people think that this trend has adverse effects on the society while others believe that it is seen as a natural trend and right for people to choose this type of marriage. Should gay marriage be legal? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Nowadays, some countries choose to pass laws related to homosexual marriages and others have not yet.
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 kind of
marriage
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 is gradually accepted by the public who think it is natural between
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 who have the same sex.
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, others argue there will be negative influences on society. As far as I am concerned, I am
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 of
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 who stand in an agreeable position of homosexual
marriage
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. Dissenters feel that
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 should be one man and one woman who decide to live together for the lifetime to come, rather than two
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 humans. They indicate
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 situation does not coincide with traditional values and it
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 spoils societal stability. In some cultures and religions, two
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 who have identical genders become couples, and even marrying each other is not allowed by their society because their frame of reference obeys the conventional custom that was inherited from ancestors.
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, the public who think it is normal argues that
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 kind of
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 is a trend, and many
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 around have
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 marriages more or less because
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 phenomenon has become prevalent as time advances.
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, the multitude's attitude and the uptake for gay
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 aggressively become optimistic. In my opinion,
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 marriages are not different from traditional ones, and it has no bad effect on our surroundings.
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, the only difference is giving birth to children. In a nutshell, conservative
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 insist that
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marriage
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 affects traditional morality and ethics and that gays are abnormal.
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, I think whatever the company with gays or the
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 with them are all the same as when we interact with other common humans
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