The graph below shows information about male and female gym membership between 1980 and 2010. write 150 words

The graph below shows information about male and female gym membership between 1980 and 2010.  write 150 words
The line chart provides key information about the
numbers
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number
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of
gym
membership
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memberships
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for both genders from 1980 to 2010. The units are measured in figures.
Overall
, it can be seen that the
gym
membership
for men and women was equivalent in three different periods.
In addition
, there was a sharp increase
of
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in
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the
men
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men's
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gym
membership
in the beginning,
whereas
the female
membership
experienced a slight fluctuation.
According to
what is shown, in 1980, the
membership
of men was higher than women by about 1000,
while
it was the opposite,
at the end
of the given time.
In addition
,
the
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male
gym
membership
reached
the
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a
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peak two
time
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, in 1985, at around 4000 and, in 2005, at approximately 5000.
Also
, it dropped dramatically to nearly 1500, in 1995, and it plunged again to less than 1000,
at the end
.
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In terms
of female
membership
,
it
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fluctuated over the given period, where it peaked at about 2900, in 1995, which was larger than the male
membership
.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "at the end, in addition".
Vocabulary: Replace the words gym, membership with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Fluctuate
  • Spike
  • Steady increase
  • Decline
  • Plateau
  • Peak
  • Surge
  • Membership uptake
  • Gender disparity
  • Health consciousness
  • Fitness regimes
  • Societal norms
  • Technological advancements
  • Demographic shift
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