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You borrowed an important textbook from a classmate last term. You now realize your classmate had returned home overseas and you still have the book. Write a letter to him/her. In your letter. -apologize for the mistake -find out how important the book is to him/her -say what you will do

#textbook #classmate #term #home #book #-apologize #mistake #-find #-say
Dear Sir or Madam, The reason why I am addressing you is that I do not know when you will go abroad
due to
 the fact that I did not give you
this
book
. I apologize for not giving you the
book
 on time. I will give you the
book
 at our next meeting. I did not know when you
will
Wrong verb form
would
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 go
aboard
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abroad
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. I
am apologize
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apologize
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 sincerely for any inconvenience caused
due to
 retaining the
book
 longer than anticipated.
This
 one
left
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was left
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 by his friend's grandfather, because of
being
Wrong verb form
is
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 very dear to him the main reason is that
this
book
 reminds me of my grandfather. I will give you the
book
 at our next meeting. I will keep the
book
 until our next meeting. Thanking you
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Yours
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Your
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Yours
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 sincerely Name: Absattorov Jamshid
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logical structure
Work on developing a clearer structure for your letter. Consider opening with a specific greeting, introducing the issue in the first paragraph, detailing your solutions in the middle paragraphs, and closing with a summary or farewell.
greeting and closing
Attempt to use a clearer, more personal greeting if you know the person's name, and a suitable closing to make your letter feel more complete.
single idea per paragraph
Try to keep one main idea per paragraph and use transitional phrases to link your ideas more smoothly.
complete response
Ensure to fully address all the bullet points from the task. It appears you've overlooked detailing how you will resolve the issue of returning the book, such as mailing it.
suitable writing tone
Maintain a consistent and suitable tone throughout your letter. It should reflect the informal or semi-formal nature, depending on your relationship with the recipient. Adding personal touches or apologies can help.
task achievement
You've successfully apologised for your mistake, which is a crucial part of the task.
task achievement
Your letter attempts to inquire about the book's importance to your friend, demonstrating an effort to address the task's requirements.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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