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studying the English language in an English-speaking country is the best but not only way.Do you agree or disagree with this statement?write an essay of about 300words expressing your views on the statement with title given.

#english #language #country #title
It is commonly known that we are living in an age where technology and culture are developing at a rapid rate and changing every aspect of our
life
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. A large number of
students
 still study
English
language
 in
an
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English
language
 in an
English
-speaking
country
 because they can communicate with other foreign
students
 and be able to improve their
speaking
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English
 skills .
However
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 comparing with it .In my opinion,studying the
English
language
 is the best way but not
only
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 way . First of all, studying the
English
language
 in an
English speaking
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country
 is able to widen our friend circle,broaden our horizons ,and attach other different cultures
are
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to
make
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students
 improve
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communicate
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 with other countries people .
In addition
 ,
under
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 studying the
English
language
 in an
English
-speaking
country
let
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students
to
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improve
interpersonal
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 skills to achieve their career success.
In contrast
 ,
this
 plan
is need
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 to spend a lot of money .Maybe some
students
 can’t spend a lot of money on it and with the technologies
develop
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 constantly ,our
phone
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phones
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 have a function which can transaction a lot of
essay
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 about
English
 . In conclusion ,studying the
English
language
 in an
English
-speaking
country
 is the best but not only way.
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clarity
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detail
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structure
Work on paragraph structure for better coherence. Use clear topic sentences at the beginning of paragraphs to guide the reader through your argument, and make sure each paragraph focuses on a single main idea.
grammar
Consider revising the essay for grammatical and punctuation mistakes. Careful use of language will improve the overall quality of your writing.
introduction
You've effectively introduced the topic and provided a clear stance in the introduction.
content coverage
You've shown an understanding of various benefits associated with studying in an English-speaking country, expanding on topics like cultural exchange and career success.

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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