The shortage of housing in big cities can cause severe consequences. Only government action can solve this problem. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Undoubtedly, the
shortage
of housing in metropolitan areas is a major social issue and has a serious impact on their citizens. Some advocates mentioned that only the Use synonyms
government
can take the appropriate actions to resolve Use synonyms
this
vital problem. The regulator can formulate the long-term resolution of the housing problem and commercial companies or non-profit organizations can work with Linking Words
government
bodies to manipulate the short-term rules to help those Use synonyms
people
suffering from a Use synonyms
shortage
of housing.
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To begin
with, Linking Words
it is clear that
not sufficient land to build the housing estate is one of the key factors in the Linking Words
shortage
of housing. As Use synonyms
government
bodies are the land owners in its territory, they have the right to make the new lands. Use synonyms
For example
, new lands in Hong Kong can be made by reclamation. New houses can be built in the new district. If so, Linking Words
people
can relocate from the old zone to the new district and the old building can be rebuilt into a new modern building. Land-making is the Use synonyms
government
's responsibility.
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On the other hand
, some non-Linking Words
government
bodies are managing different buildings and homes. They can request to change the purpose to allow Use synonyms
people
to live here. Use synonyms
For example
, as factories in Hong Kong are moved to mainland China, some empty industrial buildings can be changed for residential purposes. Those changes can help Linking Words
people
to live in suitable homes which can improve their living standards.
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To sum up
, the Linking Words
government
not only resolves the Use synonyms
shortage
of housing by land-making but Use synonyms
also
business companies and charity organizations can facilitate the resolution of Linking Words
this
housing problem by using different kinds of buildings in efficient ways.Linking Words
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