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The bar chart below illustrates five different industries’ percentage share of Brazil’s economy in 2009 and 2019 with a forecast for 2029. Write 150 words.

The bar chart below illustrates five different industries’ percentage share of Brazil’s economy in 2009 and 2019 with a forecast for 2029. Write 150 words.
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The bar chart provides key information about five industries, which support the economic status in Brazil across three different years. The units are measured in percentages.
Overall
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, it can be seen that the finance sector is the most significant one, as it provides the highest ratio of
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 to the economy throughout the given time.
In addition
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, finance accounted for the biggest proportion of
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 ,in 2019,
whereas
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 the lowest percentage of
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 was
due to
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 manufacturing in the same year.
According to
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 what is shown, finance started, at roughly 32%, in 2009 and increased gradually to just over 35%, in 2019. After that, it is expected to rise to about 42%, in 2029. Food processing contributed by around 20% of
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, in 2020, which was about twice its ratio, in 2009.
In addition
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, it is predicted to decline to approximately 10%, in 2029. In terms of oil, coal and gas, they represented about a third percentage of
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 around 33%, in 2019, which was higher than its
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, in 2009 by nearly 7%.
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, it is expected to drop again to 25%, in 2029.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "in addition".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words shares with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "provides" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "ratio" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • percentage share
  • economic growth
  • industry forecast
  • notable growth
  • decline
  • steady growth
  • trend
  • significant increase
  • economic landscape
  • industry sector
  • projected growth
  • consumer preferences
  • technological advancements
  • industrial transformation
  • mature industry
  • economic policies
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