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The graph below gives information about international tourist arrivals in five countries. USA,France, malaysia, Brazil and Egypt

The graph below gives information about international tourist arrivals in five countries. USA,France, malaysia, Brazil and Egypt
"The provided chart illustrates the influx of international guests in five different nations from 1995 to 2010.
Overall
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, there was a consistent rise in international visitor
arrivals
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 across all five countries during the specified period. Notably, the USA emerged as the most
favored
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 destination, hosting the highest number of
arrivals
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,
while
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 Brazil received the fewest. Beginning with the USA, there was a steady ascent in the number of international tourists over the span of a decade, climbing from approximately 20
million
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 individuals to 90
million
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 by 2005.
Subsequently
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, there was a slight dip to around 88
million
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 visitors in the final five years. In France, there was a remarkable surge in
arrivals
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, reaching around 60
million
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 in 2000.
This
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 figure continued to rise steadily over the decade, peaking at approximately 90
million
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 visitors. Malaysia experienced modest growth in international tourist
arrivals
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, with numbers increasing by roughly 20
million
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 over the 15-year period, surpassing 40
million
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 by 2015. Turning to Brazil and Egypt, both countries saw comparable patterns in international tourist
arrivals
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. Initial figures stood at around 10
million
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 individuals, gradually increasing to approximately 20
million
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 by 2015."

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Vocabulary: Replace the words arrivals, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "rise" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • International tourist arrivals
  • Trends
  • Highlighting
  • Analysing
  • Potential factors
  • Growth patterns
  • Declines
  • Driving those changes
  • Influenced
  • External factors
  • Global economic conditions
  • Health crises
  • Government policies
  • Visa regulations
  • Tourism promotion efforts
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