Technology is becoming progressively universal. In the fullness of time, classroom teachers will be totally substituted for technology. Do you agree or disagree?

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It is no doubt that technology is becoming increasingly prevalent in classrooms these days. There are some people
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that technology should take over the place of
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. I firmly disagree with
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idea because the cost will be expensive and cannot meet the individual needs of
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. Replacing
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completely in the classroom with
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is not feasible for school management as it costs a significant amount of money. Schools usually have limited funding, and replacing all educators with advanced
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requires new equipment
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as tablets with interactive touch screens, electronic
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and cameras which enable school operators to monitor students. In
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case, operating a high-tech classroom would be more expensive than having educators
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, it would be impossible to replace educators.
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, taking over personnel with technology may lead to the individual needs of students being unmet. It is because the learning skills and capabilities of every single student are different, without proper guidance and supervision from experienced trainers, it would be difficult to design tailored study plans to meet individuals' needs.
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who have been diagnosed with ADHD should not be taught the same as other peers in the classroom, a detailed teaching strategy should be implemented by
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to accommodate the needs of these special
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cannot do
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, having all
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replaced by
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may oversee
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who have special study needs. In conclusion, I strongly disagree with the statement that
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should be fully replaced by modern
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because
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cost over budget and usually do not meet the study needs of students who have special conditions.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • progressively
  • substituted
  • prevalent
  • crucial
  • enhance
  • support
  • guidance
  • interaction
  • personal touch
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