Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of working from home. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

With the advancement of
technology
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employees
can
work
from their homes.It has a few benefits
as well as
drawbacks. I will explain in
this
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alone with some examples including my knowledge and experience. On the one hand,some people say that working from home saves
time
and money
both
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.
Moreover
,when
employees
work
from they do not need to go to their office they do not require any transportation to reach their office which can reduce transportation costs and
time
as well.
For example
,since COVID-19
employees
are working from home
this
growing number is increasing day by day.
According to
Cambridge University's recently published research working from home is more productive it has many reasons because
employees
have more
time
, are more
energitic
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energetic
and
they
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can expand their
time
with their
family
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families
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.
On the other hand
, working remotely has some drawbacks.
Furthermore
,
employees
have
losing
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interest in the company and their co-workers' lack
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face-to-face communication.
For instance
,Apple company offered remote working
there
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employees
but these workers faced different sorts of troubles
such
as effective communication and
time
management. In my opinion,both are effective if the company handle them effectively.
Moreover
,I have seen
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hundreds of companies that allow and offer online
work
instead
of offline they were successful because of effective management.
In particular
, Amazon and Alibaba
this
companies are successful
they
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because they
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offered
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their workers remote
work
. In conclusion, offline and online working both are effective if
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company company
and administration handle them effectively.Through technological advancement, more and more companies offer their
employees
remote working options.
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