The graph below gives information about international tourist arrivals in five countries.

The graph below gives information about international tourist arrivals in five countries.
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The diagram illustrates the number of global travelers who went to those countries including
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USA
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the USA
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,
France
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, Malaysia, Brazil, and Egypt from 1995 to 2010.
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, there was experienced increased trend over a period of 15 years.
According to
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the line charts, it can be seen that the
USA
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was the most popular place in 1995.
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,
the
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apply
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tourist travel to the
USA
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only showed a slight increase after 2000
while
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people
took
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who took
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a
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apply
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trip
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trips
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to
France
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were
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was
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getting more and more higher. it is noticeable that only approximately 30% of holidaymakers went to
France
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in 1995,
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figure experienced a dramatic rise 5 years later. it showed gradual growth after 2000 and
then
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it reached its peak at 90 million in 2010 which was the same as the
USA
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. Based on the data provided, compared to other three countries, there was no significant increase from 1995 to 2010
To sum up
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, the
USA
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and
France
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still are popular areas for people who want to visit.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words usa, france with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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