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The graph below gives information about international tourist arrivals in five countries.

The graph below gives information about international tourist arrivals in five countries.
The diagram illustrates the number of global travelers who went to those countries including
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USA
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the USA
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,
France
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, Malaysia, Brazil, and Egypt from 1995 to 2010.
Overall
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, there was experienced increased trend over a period of 15 years.
According to
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 the line charts, it can be seen that the
USA
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 was the most popular place in 1995.
However
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,
the
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apply
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tourist travel to the
USA
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 only showed a slight increase after 2000
while
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 people
took
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who took
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a
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apply
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trip
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trips
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 to
France
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were
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was
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 getting more and more higher. it is noticeable that only approximately 30% of holidaymakers went to
France
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 in 1995,
this
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 figure experienced a dramatic rise 5 years later. it showed gradual growth after 2000 and
then
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 it reached its peak at 90 million in 2010 which was the same as the
USA
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. Based on the data provided, compared to other three countries, there was no significant increase from 1995 to 2010
To sum up
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, the
USA
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 and
France
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 still are popular areas for people who want to visit.

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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words usa, france with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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