The graph below gives information about international tourist arrivals in five countries.

The graph below gives information about international tourist arrivals in five countries.
The diagram illustrates the number of global travelers who went to those countries including
USA
Correct article usage
the USA
show examples
,
France
, Malaysia, Brazil, and Egypt from 1995 to 2010.
Overall
, there was experienced increased trend over a period of 15 years.
According to
the line charts, it can be seen that the
USA
was the most popular place in 1995.
However
,
the
Correct article usage
apply
show examples
tourist travel to the
USA
only showed a slight increase after 2000
while
people
took
Correct pronoun usage
who took
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a
Correct article usage
apply
show examples
trip
Fix the agreement mistake
trips
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to
France
were
Correct subject-verb agreement
was
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getting more and more higher. it is noticeable that only approximately 30% of holidaymakers went to
France
in 1995,
this
figure experienced a dramatic rise 5 years later. it showed gradual growth after 2000 and
then
it reached its peak at 90 million in 2010 which was the same as the
USA
. Based on the data provided, compared to other three countries, there was no significant increase from 1995 to 2010
To sum up
, the
USA
and
France
still are popular areas for people who want to visit.
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