Some companies sponsor sport and sport star as a way to advertise themselves. Some people think it is good while others think there are disadvantages. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Nowadays , many
companies
followed
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follow
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new
manner
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manners
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to show their products and services by supporting
athltes
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athletes
or
sport
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sports
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to present in public. In fact , two
side
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sides
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of
this
event
gain
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gains
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their goals. I agree with
this
methodes
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method
. But , we have to consider the positive and negative sides.
Sport
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Sports
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play
significant
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a significant
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role in
the
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apply
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people
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people's
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life. Namely, Most of the time making
group
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a group
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to
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play football
need
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needs
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facilities and money,
to
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and to
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make
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meet
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the needs of
this
subject members have to invest money or
equipments
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equipment
types of equipment
pieces of equipment
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to start. at
first,
memeber donot
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members do not
have enough money and need
some one
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someone
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support them. So ,
companies
could solve
this
obstacel
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obstacle
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easily
easly
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easily
and make royal
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customer
coustomer
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customers
,
On the other hand
, the best
sportman
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sportsman
sportsmen
in the
word
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world
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definded
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defined
in
this
way
to
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by
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other teams.
Firstly
,
frime
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family
support
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supports
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the team or
sport
start in order to be
famouse
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famous
in the
society
,
scondary
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secondary
, they help them to enhance
them selves
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themselves
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. Other young generation, by following champions encourage to start
sport
. O the other hand,
companies
follow
their
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they're
they are
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polices
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policies
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to get
thier
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their
points , for
instans
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instance
,
society
combat
with
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crime
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a crime
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by
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through
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a sport
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sport
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sports
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star
whom his
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whose
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family
couldnot
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could not
couldn't
help
him
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apply
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to continue in
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the sport
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sport
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sports
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. but ,
the
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scheme
that
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apply
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conduct
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conducted
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by
companies
they can easily be the best in the
sport
.
Furthermore
,by
soppurting
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supporting
sport
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sport,
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the y help to progress in human
life style
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lifestyle
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make awareness of them and help
government
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the government
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to fight
cronic
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chronic
diesase
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diseases
. In conclusion, the best way to
illustarate
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illustrate
product
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products
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or services
to
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for
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the
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apply
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society
and raise incomes
was
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is by
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soppurting
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supporting
sport
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sports
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or
sport star
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sports stars
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,
also
to have
good
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a good
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country and make
healthy
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a healthy
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society
supportig
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supporting
them
by
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through
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companies
is the best way that
i
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I
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have ever seen in my life .I directly agree with
this
work.
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