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the map below show an industrial area in the town of Norbition and planned future development of the site.

the map below show an industrial area in the town of Norbition and planned future development of the site.
#show #area #town #norbition #future #development #site
The maps below
displays
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 an industrial surface in the city of Norbition and
planned
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the planned
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future
 development of the site.
Overall
, there are 2 maps, in the first map we have
plan
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a plan
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 of
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the norbiton
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norbiton
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Norbiton
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 industrial area now,
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and in
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in
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on
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 the second map we have
plan
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a plan
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 of planned
future
 development.
Future
 changes are building new facilities, new
roads
 and new housing
area
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areas
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instead
 of old
factories
. There are 8
factories
 located
nearly
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 to the
road
 in the land. We have
town
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a town
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 and farmland nearly located to the river right now. There
is
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a 2
roads
, the first is a main
road
 and the second is a
road
 to the
factories
. There is only one building as
factories
. There will be entertaining places
such
 as
playground
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playgrounds
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, shops and important facilities for
town
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a town
the town
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such
 as
school
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schools
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 and medical
centre
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centres
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 in planned
future
 developments. There will be a new
road
 going through
river
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the river
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 which help to go from town to farmland in the
future
. The
factories
 will be crushed and
instead
 of them, housing will be there. There will be 4
roads
. The main
road
 and the other
road
 will stay without any changes, but 2
another
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other
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roads
 will be built.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "instead, such".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 70%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words future, roads, factories, road with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • industrial area
  • planned development
  • existing facilities
  • proposed changes
  • infrastructure
  • public spaces
  • sustainable development
  • green spaces
  • pollution control
  • local community
  • job creation
  • amenities
  • property values
  • displacement
  • traffic congestion
  • environmental degradation
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