The chart below shows the changes that took place in three different areas of crime in New Port city center from 2003 to 2012.
The given line graph illustrates the transformation that
occurs
in three dissimilar spaces of Wrong verb form
occurred
offense
in New Port city Change the spelling
offence
center
between 2003 to 2012
Change the spelling
centre
Overall
, there are
a Change the verb form
is
radically
reduction in Change the adverb
radical
burglary
rate, and the rate of Correct article usage
the burglary
the
theft from Correct article usage
apply
person
Fix the agreement mistake
people
such
as robbery are
wavering.
On the one hand, the number of Change the verb form
is
burglary
in 2003 Change to a plural noun
burglaries
just
below 3500, Add a missing verb
was just
then
it reached its peak at 3800 in the next year. However
, the figures of
Change preposition
for
burglary
fall rapidly from 3800 to 1200 in the following 4 years. After all, the amount of burglary
was maintain
Change the verb form
was maintained
was maintaining
about
1500 from 2009 to 2012.
Change preposition
at about
In
the other hand,the Change preposition
On
figue
Correct your spelling
figure
of
car theft Change preposition
for
stay
unchanged Wrong verb form
stayed
about
2800 from 2003 to 2005. Change preposition
at about
However
, it declined the lowest
point Correct pronoun usage
its lowest
to
2000 in 2006, Change preposition
in
then
it had slight fluctuations from 2007 to 2012.
It clear
that the digit of robbery had slightly changed. it increases slightly to 1000 from 2003 to 2005, Add a missing verb
is clear
then
it decreases to the lowest points
at 500 in 2008. Fix the agreement mistake
point
Finally
, it had slightly waveing
.Correct your spelling
wavered
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words burglary with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slight" was used 4 times.
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