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You had some photos of your family taken by a professional photographer. Write a letter to the photographer. In your letter •say that you liked his/her photos of your family •ask him/her to be your photographer at a special family event •give him/her the details of the event.

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Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing
this
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 letter to request you to be a one-day photographer for our special event. I am Sam, currently living in Toronto City in the Woodside neighbourhood for the past twenty-five years. Recently, I went to one of our family member’s house. Over there, me and my wife saw the photos taken by you. To be honest, all the images which you have taken were excellent. Especially, the colour of each picture was excellent.
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, I am going to conduct my son’s first birthday party at my house. So, I request you to be the photographer for that day. Apart from that, I already brought some random decoration items from Walmart to decorate my house for the party
Finally
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, I would like to share my contact information in
this
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 letter. If you prefer to call, you can call the number +1234567890, or else if you prefer email,
then
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 you can send an email to my address which is [email protected]. I hope you can understand my needs and I look forward to hearing from you. Yours faithfully, Sam

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greeting and closing
Consider using a more specific opening and closing. Although 'Dear Sir or Madam' and 'Yours faithfully' are acceptable, personalizing these phrases adds a personal touch, especially when you're familiar with the photographer's work.
logical structure
To improve 'single idea per paragraph', ensure each paragraph has a clear main idea. The second paragraph mixes introduction and feedback, separating these might enhance clarity.
complete response
For an even better task response, including a specific date and time for the event or asking about the photographer's availability within a certain period could offer more detailed planning.
task achievement
The letter politely requests the photographer's services and clearly expresses satisfaction with past work.
logical structure
The orderly progression from introduction, to request, to event details, and finally, contact information maintains a good structure.

The Greeting

Depending on the style and aim of the letter, you will need to adapt your greeting.

Always start an informal letter in the ways:

  • Dear + name
  • Hi / Hello + name

‘Dear...’ is more appropriate, so stick with this.

For a formal letter there are two options for the greeting:

  • Use Dear Sir or Madam if you don’t know the name of the person you are writing to.
  • Use Dear + surname if you do know their name, e.g. Dear Mr Smith or Dear Mrs Jones.

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