You recently received a letter from a friend asking for advice about whether to go to college or to try to get a job. You think he/she should get a job. Write a letter to this friend. In your letter: say why he/she would not enjoy going to college explain why getting a job is a good idea for him/her suggest types of job that would be suitable for him/her

My dear friend. I hope my letter finds you in
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good health and spirits, I have read your letter, and I would like to give you some
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. Actually, If
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were you, I would go to find a good job, As you know, after my
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, I decided to complete my high education directly
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and to be honest with you, It was difficult, I am
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feel it is boring
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because many classes and it is tough, so I don't want you to repeat my mistake, you have to search for a job,
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you have to think about the money and your budget in future. I think that
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job
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now,
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is
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idea,
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you have to have experience and skills to face
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life,
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to earn and save money. I suggest
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you
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get
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business, i believe in your skills, you will be
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worker, because you already
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done
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univercity
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university
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, i mean you will be not
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level
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if you
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take
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hope my letter will be helpful. Wish you all the best.
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coherence cohesion
Your letter is warmly addressed and maintains a suitable tone throughout, making it feel personal. Try to structure your paragraphs more clearly by having one main idea per paragraph and using transitional phrases for smoother flow.
task achievement
You've done a fair job responding to the task by answering all parts, although some parts could be elaborated more with specific examples or explanations for stronger support. Doing so can provide a more persuasive argument.
tone
The personal tone and friendliness in your writing establish a good relationship with the reader.
task comprehension
You made an effort to address all aspects of the task, showing understanding of the assignment.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Real-world experience
  • Practical experience
  • Financial independence
  • On-the-job training
  • Student loan debt
  • Personal growth
  • Professional networking
  • Career development
  • Skilled workers
  • Job market
  • Career goals
  • Immediate income
  • Professional relationships
  • Market demand
  • Defining interests
  • Educational investments
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