You recently received a letter from a friend asking for advice about whether to go to college or to try to get a job. You think he/she should get a job. Write a letter to this friend. In your letter: say why he/she would not enjoy going to college explain why getting a job is a good idea for him/her suggest types of job that would be suitable for him/her
My dear friend.
I hope my letter finds you in
a
good health and spirits, I have read your letter, and I would like to give you some Correct article usage
apply
advices
.
Actually, If Change the wording
advice
pieces of advice
bits of advice
i
were you, I would go to find a good job, As you know, after my Change the capitalization
I
gradutaion
, I decided to complete my high education directlyCorrect your spelling
graduation
,
and to be honest with you, It was difficult, I am Remove the comma
apply
strugling
now, Correct your spelling
struggling
i
feel it is boringChange the capitalization
I
,
because many classes and it is tough, so I don't want you to repeat my mistake, you have to search for a job, Remove the comma
apply
however
you have to think about the money and your budget in future.
I think that Add the comma(s)
however,
gitting
Correct your spelling
getting
job
now, Correct article usage
a job
it
is Correct pronoun usage
apply
good
idea, Change the article
a good
Firstly
you have to have experience and skills to face the
life, Correct article usage
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Socendly
to earn and save money.
I suggest Correct your spelling
socially
for
you Change preposition
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to
get Fix the infinitive
apply
in
business, i believe in your skills, you will be Change preposition
into
good
worker, because you already Correct article usage
a good
had
done Wrong verb form
have
this
in
Change preposition
at
univercity
, and Correct your spelling
university
then
will be improved
, i mean you will be not Wrong verb form
improve
in
Change preposition
at
same
levelAdd an article
the same
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if you Remove the comma
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take Verb problem
are
this
discioun.
In conclusion, i
hope my letter will be helpful.
Wish you all the best.Change the capitalization
I
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coherence cohesion
Your letter is warmly addressed and maintains a suitable tone throughout, making it feel personal. Try to structure your paragraphs more clearly by having one main idea per paragraph and using transitional phrases for smoother flow.
task achievement
You've done a fair job responding to the task by answering all parts, although some parts could be elaborated more with specific examples or explanations for stronger support. Doing so can provide a more persuasive argument.
tone
The personal tone and friendliness in your writing establish a good relationship with the reader.
task comprehension
You made an effort to address all aspects of the task, showing understanding of the assignment.