The gap between the rich and the poor has been enlarged in recent years. What are the causes and solutions for this problem?
Today, the distance between
people
who live at the highest level of society
and people
who live at the lowest level of society
has increased.This
essay will argue that most politicians put their attention and assets on rich people
beside of increasing the rate
of inflation
. Also
, this
essay will suggest that to overcome these situations, providing some positions for poor people
to invest their money and increasing our concern about domestic products are the main solutions.
On the one hand, these days most people
who have a position in government in a country only put their all effort into rich people
. Furthermore
, the inflation
rate
in the modern era is one of the crucial concerns for many countries. The vast majority of governments around the world need funding, so to reach this
goal they give more attention and assets to rich people
. Also
, a couple of years ago human beings faced different catastrophic situations which had a negative effect on the world's economy as well as
increased the inflation
rate
. For instance
, the inflation
rate
between 2019 and 2020 rose to more than 20% because of Corona pandemic.
On the other hand
, to overcome this
situation providing some opportunities for mid-level or low-level of society
to invest part of their wages in governmental projects ,and reducing the dependency to other nations could be the main solutions. If politicians can change their perspective and provide a situation where poor people
can invest a small amount of money in it to reach a lot of benefits instead
of only using rich people
's assets, it could help other levelslevel
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levels
society
to reduce their gap from rich people
. Also
, if governments just focus on domestic products instead
of importing other materials that can be produced in the country, they can create more job opportunities for people
especially poor people
. As a result
, not only the inflation
rate
would resist different situations but also
a lot of employees can find a good job with a great wage.
In conclusion, in the modern day the gap between two groups of people
, rich and poor level, has increased due to
a lot of attention by governments to rich people
and rising inflation
globally. However
, providing a situation for the investment of poor people
and decreasing the dependency on other nations are the main answers to this
gap.Submitted by ramtin.n1374 on
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General
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The essay addresses the topic and provides arguments and solutions related to the gap between the rich and the poor.
Coherence & Cohesion
The introduction and conclusion are present and wrap up the essay's ideas appropriately.
Coherence & Cohesion
You've made a solid effort to structure your essay into clear paragraphs, each addressing different aspects of the topic.
Word Count
IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.
A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.
Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.