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The table below gives information about a bakery's average sales in three different branched in 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below gives information about a bakery's average sales in three different branched in 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The table below illustrates the numbers of sales in three bakery's brands's averages in the period 2005.
It is clear that
 the
averages
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average
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 figures
of
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for
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London
Covent
Garden
was
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were
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 the highest in four categories. The most popular
item
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items
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 in
London
Covent
Garden
,
London
Oxford
 Circus and
London
St
John
's
Wood
was
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were
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 croissant, medium latte and strawberry tart respectively.
To begin
 with the
number
 of
transations
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transactions
transitions
,
London
Covent
Garden
 was 642,
following
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followed
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 was
London
Oxford
 Circus with 538 and final belonged to 269 of
St
John
's
Wood
. Addictional with transaction value when sales in three branches were 7.85 pounds, 4.51
pound
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pounds
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 and 5.01
pound
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pounds
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 respectively and the lowest was
Oxford
 Cirus. A similar trend
as
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in
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number
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a number
the number
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 of
transactions
was
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apply
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occured
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occurred
 in
number
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the number
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 of Eat
in
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apply
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Transactions
along with
number
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a number
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 of Take Away
Transactions
. In Eat in
Transactions
, the
Covent
Garden
 peaked at 304, which
more
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is more
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57
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than 57
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 than
Oxford
 Cirus and more 154 than
St
John
's
Wood
. Duty Take Away
Transactions
,
St
John
's
Wood
 sales was 119, litter 172 than
Oxford
 Circus and 219 than
Covent
Garden
.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words london, covent, garden, oxford, st, john, wood, number, transactions with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "numbers of" was used 5 times.
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