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The plans below show the layout of the university’s sports centre now, and how it will look after redevelopment. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The given plans illustrate a university’s sports complex current layout and proposal for its
further
 improvement.
Overall
, the university
sport
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sports
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center
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centre
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 is expected to be bigger, with numerous additional facilities. Presently, situated behind the reception area is a 25-meter indoor pool
along with
 a changing room and seating areas found on either side. There is
also
 a gym towards the back of the building.
Additionally
, there are two outdoor courts next to the main building on the east and west sides. Looking forward, the functions at the
center
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centre
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 will remain unchanged, except the gym
that
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which
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 will be extended to the east side. A sports hall ,dance studios and added changing room, will replace the east outdoor courts,
while
 the west is set to take over by a massive leisure pool and extra changing room. There are
also
 proposals for a cafe and sports shop at the entrance of the property.
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Introduction
Ensure the introduction briefly sets up what the comparison will cover, summarizing the main changes without going into too much detail too early.
Structure
Create clear paragraphs for each key area of change to aid readability and structure.
Coherence
Use a range of linking words or phrases to show comparisons and changes more effectively, such as 'whereas', 'while', 'in contrast', etc.
Detail
Incorporate more specific examples or details to enrich your comparison, like giving specifics on how much larger or the precise nature of additions.
Clarity
The overall comparison between the current and future state of the sports complex is clear and concise.
Introduction
Good use of introductory sentences to orient the reader.
Grammar
Effective use of present and future tenses to distinguish between the current and proposed states.

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