the chart below shows the changes in three different areas of cime in manchester city center from 2003-2012.

the chart below shows the changes in three different areas of cime in manchester city center from 2003-2012.
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The following line graph depicts the
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changes in the
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of various kinds of crimes in Manchester city
center
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from 2003 until 2012. Those crimes are burglary, car theft and robbery.
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, we can observe that the
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of
burglary
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have decreased substantially through
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period, unlike
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car theft which increased until 2012. The
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burglary was almost 3500 in 2003 and
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number
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slightly increased in 2004 and reached a peak of around 3750.
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,
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the
number
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of burglaries kept decreasing until 2008 and reached its minimum value which was
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slightly
more than 1000
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.
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, until 2012 the
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of
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crime slightly increased and was almost 1500
cases
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. The
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of car theft
cases
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stayed somewhat constant until 2008 with slightly more than 2000
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.
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this
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number
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kept increasing until 2012 and peaked at almost 3000
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. The
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of robbery
cases
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did not change a lot
throughtout
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throughout
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period of time. Its
number
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kept fluctuating between 500 and approximately 900
cases
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from 2003 until 2012.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, cases with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "changes" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 6 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 3 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • trend
  • significant
  • fluctuating
  • anomalies
  • external factors
  • economic fluctuation
  • law enforcement strategies
  • societal changes
  • speculation
  • impact
  • data collection
  • reliability
  • interpretation
  • measures
  • strategies
  • broader implications
  • development
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