The pie chart shows the amount of money that a children’s charity located in the USA spent and received in one year.

The pie chart shows the amount of money that a children’s charity located in the USA spent and received in one year.
The pie chart illustrates the proportion of the expenditures and the incomes of a children's
charity
in the USA in one year.
According to
the figures, it can be seen that
a
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the
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money that the
charity
gets is more than it spends.
A donated food
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Donated food
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is a majority of
income
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the income
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in the
charity
.
While
they spent on a program services the most compared to the other spending.
A
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main revenue source that the children's
charity
received came from the donated food,
occupied
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which occupied
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by
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86.6%. Followed by
a
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community contributions which represented
at
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10.4%.
Moreover
, the minority of their incomes was an investment income and
a
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government grants with only 0.2% of their total revenue.
On the other hand
, the children's
charity
expended
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expenditure
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on the program service accounted for 95.8% of the expenditures.
A fundraising
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Fundraising
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came second place responsible for 2.6%.
Additionally
, they use their money on
a
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management and general the least, which was just 1.6%.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words charity with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • pie chart
  • charity
  • non-profit organization
  • funds
  • revenue
  • donations
  • grants
  • fundraising
  • expenditure
  • allocations
  • administrative costs
  • program services
  • beneficiaries
  • financial year
  • breakdown
  • percentage
  • portion
  • sector
  • philanthropy
  • budgeting
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