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Some people think the government should pay for healthcare and education, but there is no agreement about whether it is the government’s responsibility. What is your opinion?

Many people believe that the authorities should provide
education
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 and medical
services
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 at no cost.
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, there is ongoing debate about whether these
services
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 should be accessible without payment. I completely agree with
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 view, as
healthcare
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 is a humanitarian responsibility, and
education
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 should be freely available to every social group. Providing
healthcare
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services
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 free of charge reflects our shared humanity. Unfortunately, thousands of innocent people die every year
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 the lack of adequate medical facilities,
while
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 international
organizations
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such
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 as the United Nations often remain inactive.
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, research conducted in Kenya revealed that 73% of deaths were caused by outdated technologies and a shortage of
healthcare
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services
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.
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 demonstrates the severe consequences of making medical treatment dependent on payment.
Likewise
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,
education
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 faces similar issues.
Although
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 schooling is available in most countries, inequality still exists within educational systems.
This
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 problem arises when people are discriminated against based on their income or social class.
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, in Saudi Arabia, there are various types of schools—private, public, and international—and the more expensive the school is, the stronger its curriculum tends to be.
Such
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 disparities create significant inequality among students. Providing
education
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 free of charge would help ensure fairness and equal opportunities for all citizens.
To sum up
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, both
education
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 and
healthcare
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 should be accessible at no cost. If these essential
services
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 require payment, thousands may lose their lives, and societies will continue to face discrimination and inequality.

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task response strengthening
Your view is clear and you state it at once. Keep this strong stance, but add a small counter point and then show why your view still wins.
coherence linking
Your ideas follow a good order. Use simple links like 'also', 'in addition', or 'for example' to connect parts better.
strength
Clear stance on the issue.
strength
Good use of real examples to illustrate points.
Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.

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