Eventually, technology will solve the most important environmental problems the world faces today. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

It is believed that some
enviromental
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environmental
problems will be solved by
technology
and it is the best solution. I agree with
this
statement
some
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extent, especially when I think about the development of
eco
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eco-cars
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cars
,
however
, there is an
oppose
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effect that
technology
can harm the
envirnoment
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environment
.
This
essay will look into the reasons and provide some examples for my opinions.
To begin
with,
installation
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of eco
cars
have
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brought an incredible savour for the planet. Since they don't require fossil fuel, and don't
exaust
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exhaust
exist
such
pollution that petrol
cars
do,
this
causes no disgust air in the
envirinment
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environment
,
cut
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down the pollution and
create
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creates
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clean
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environment. I believe
that is
the most amazing
technology
ever emerged in the world.
On the other hand
, there are some disadvantages
technology
can bring
into
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the earth. One of the
exmaples
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examples
is that using lots of
man made
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energy
still
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over the generation of eco-energy sources.
Although
,
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there are lots of shifts to the solar
panalles
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panels
that
using
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use
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eco-energy from
the
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nature, as
the
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technology
becomes more
advance
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, people nowadays are using more
of
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electricities
such
as
computors
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computers
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,
smatphones
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smartphones
that
requires
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require
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constant charges and some incredible advanced-
technology
machines at factories and offices. In
coclusion
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conclusion
,
technology
is one of the
impotant
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important
tools to
conquere
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conquer
our
enviromental
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environmental
issues
and
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apply
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,
the
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eco
cars
and using solar energy are great ideas to provide
an
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clean
envinroment
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environment
option.
However
, people are more and more requiring a lot of
energies
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energy
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as
technology
advances.
This
is one of
issues
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becuase
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because
the
electricities
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electricity
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require
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a huge amount of
man made
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energy resources other than natural
enegy
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energy
causing some harmful effects on
our
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mother nature.
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vocabulary
Ensure consistent and correct use of terminology (e.g., 'eco cars' instead of 'eco cars', 'environment' instead of 'envirinment').
grammar
Revise and proofread your essay to correct spelling and grammar inaccuracies (e.g., 'exaust' should be 'exhaust', 'disgust air' should be 'disgusting air', 'electricities' should be 'electricity').
cohesion
Enhance coherence by using transition words and phrases to connect ideas more smoothly (e.g., 'Furthermore', 'In addition', 'Moreover').
task response
Deepen your argument by balancing your views more clearly throughout the essay, not just in the conclusion, and by providing more detailed examples that support each viewpoint.
examples
Effective use of examples, like the development of eco-cars, to support your arguments.
structure
Clear structure with an introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion.
critical thinking
Demonstrating awareness of both sides of the argument.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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