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The table below shows the results of a survey where first-year students were askedto rate some aspects of their courses.

The table below shows the results of a survey where first-year students were askedto rate some aspects of their courses.
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The table illustrates the outcomes of a survey in which first-year students valued various aspects of their courses. Units are measured in percentages.
Overall
, what stands out from the graph is that students were more satisfied with their
commerce
 course.
Furthermore
, learners were pleased mainly with
pre-course
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the pre-course
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 information provided in
commerce
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the commerce
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cource
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course
. Looking into detail, regarding the quality of teaching, 95%of children were satisfied with
this
 in economics and
commerce
,
while
 the figures in
law
was
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 roughly two in three.
Likewise
, around 90% of children in economics and
commerce
 liked tutor support,
while
 in
law
 the proportion of students who liked the help of
tutor
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 was just below four in five. In terms of pre-course information satisfaction results,
commerce
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the commerce
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 course ranked first with 95%,
while
 the figures for economic and
law
 lessons were 55% and 72% , respectively. Meanwhile,
the
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resource satisfaction
such
 as print and others was around three in five in economics,
whereas
 in
law
snd
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and
commerce
 the proportions were less than 90% for each.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words commerce, law with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "information" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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