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The charts below give information about USA marriage and divorce rates between 1970 and 2000, and the marital status of adult Americans in two of the years.

The charts below give information about USA marriage and divorce rates between 1970 and 2000, and the marital status of adult Americans in two of the years.
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The first chart illustrates the alteration in the number of marriages and divorces in the USA over a 30-year period from 1970 to 2000. The second chart demonstrates
proportion
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the proportion
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 of American adults’ marital statuses in 1970 and 2000. Generally, the numbers of marriages are higher than the
divorces
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divorce
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 rates over a 30-year period.
In addition
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to
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apply
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in 1970 and 2000, the married people are more than 50
percent
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per cent
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 and
maximum
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the maximum
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 indicator on the chart.
Although
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 during the first 10 years, the number of marriages remained constant at 2.5 billion, it decreased slightly from 1990 to 2000.
Whereas
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,
divorces
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divorce
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 rates have increased by almost half a million in 10 years.
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, it
a
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little declined in
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last
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the last
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over
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10-year
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a 10-year
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 period.
Percentage
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The percentage
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 of never married, widowed and divorced did not exceed 20
percent
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per cent
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 in two years.
Nevertheless
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, The lowest of these three statuses is divorced and
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conquers
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 less than 10
percent
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per cent
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. The number of widows is
also
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 the same even though divorce
is
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was
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 very low in 1970.

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